Saturday, 20 March 2010

final- essay--------------barry

Does the benefit of tourism outweigh the cost?
It is so crucial that we can not afford to make a single mistake .However, it is not always easy to make a prudent and satisfying choice .Sometimes we find ourselves involved in dilemma. After pondering this question on many occasions, I have finally reached the conclusion that benefit of tourism is something we have to balance it .In an essay with the thesis below, I will examine some reason for merit and demerit.

In the first place, I can see that one of the advantages of tourism seems obvious .It is claimed that the economy would be prosperity, the tourism would spend money in the country and lead the relevance of industry grow up and some company will invest the place where has the business opportunity .. With this activities of business, it would have profit to local people and give them the chance to work. Secondly, when the tourism become visit the country more and more. The government will do a lot of infrastructures such as transportation and environment which are to improve sightseeing place to keep attracting tourism . Last but not least as we know accompany with such a lot of foreigners who will make the local people open their mind .

At same time , moving on to the cost which is the visitor will bring into country. First of all , the pollution has high proportion .When tourism arrive the country where is their visiting place , they start to make the pollution.. Moreover, some of them would be vandalism such as leave their rubbish everywhere and it could be worse to draw some picture on the tree ever in the heritage .Those thing might the drawback form the visiting and all the people who live here should deserved. What’s more some places should be rest to sustainable but it could not be closed because a lot of visitor want to see it .Above all of them, we can see there are some influences for people who live there.

Compared with merit and demerit , it would not easy for us to say the benefits of tourism outweigh the cost .On the on hand all we can do is that to keep the tourism coming to country for visiting to help the economy and local people have the chance to work. On the other hand, the politician should do endeavor for reducing the cost from visitor. There has a good example to support this ideal which is sustainable for environment. With this purpose in mind, I think if we can do the balance of both of it.
It would have the duo-win between visitor and country.

As I mentioned before, the profit of visitor gives the local people have chance to work in their hometown, help the economy of country and people who live there will open their mind .By contrast, there are some budget you must to pay .We have pollution, vandalism to impact on our country and it will bad influence in the environment because it does not have time to recovery. This is essay I focus on tourism interact with country, it would easy to see from the information above .The coin has two side; we must try our best to balance it.

References and Notes
1 MacKinnon, J., MacKinnon, K., Child, G. and Thorsell, J. 1986. Managing Protected Areas in the Tropics. IUCN, Gland.
2 McNeely, J.A. 1988. Economics and Biological Di- versity: Developing and Using Economic Incentives to Conserve Biological Resource. IUCN, Gland.
3 Myers, N. 1983. A Wealth of Wild Species. Westview Press, Boulder.

1 comment:

  1. Barry,

    This is a well-balanced essay with a clear structure. Where is the in-text referencing? Also, remember to italicize the names of books in bibliography and use brackets around the year. Check your referencing guide.
    A few points:

    - repetition of ideas
    ex: It is so crucial that we can not afford to make a single mistake .However, it is not always easy to make a prudent and satisfying choice .Sometimes we find ourselves involved in dilemma.

    - incorrect/inappropriate vocabulary
    ex: reason for MERIT and DEMERIT. (not synonyms here for benefits/costs)
    ex: such a lot of foreigners --> many foreigners
    ex: 'duo-win' --> win-win situation

    - fragment sentence:
    ex: At same time , moving on to the cost which is the visitor will bring into country.

    ** if you use the phrase 'moving on to...'this will be followed by another independent clause.

    -incorrect word class
    ex: It is claimed that the economy would be prosperity ---> propserous
    ex:would be vandalism --> would vandalize

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