Saturday, 20 March 2010

Final essay-----Ian

With the development of science and technology, tourism has become indispensable part of people's normal life.With the improvement of people's living standard, the ideological change, many people want to use their travel to relieve the stress in their life, to relaxation and have a rest.Along with these, tourism has been paid more attention with people. This essay will discuss 'do the benefits of tourism outweigh the costs?

First ,there is the background of the tourism.Tourism Market Trends is the World Tourism,and it will make the profit will continue growing greatly.International tourist arrivals have continued to grow from 25 million in 1950, to 277 million in 1980,438 million in 1990, 684 million in 2000, and it already got the 922 million in 2008.(tourism highlights 2009 edition)

The benefits of the visitors and the local.As we all know that the tourist means the people to another place to visit and to have experience of the local life.They must will pay a lot of money in the hotel, souvenirs, food, shopping and also the transportation,it will makes the local economic development.More than 80 countries earned over 1 billion Dollars from international tourism in 2008.(World Tourism Organization 2009)

Through these we can see that the development of the tourism industry makes a great improvement for the local economic development.For the visitor are not only to relax and know the local culture, the local people will still get a lot of information they didnot know before.It also makes an effort to bring people and nations together and promote the global communication,make the place of tourism famous.(FIJET Introduction,http://www.fijet.net)And the tourism companies can provide more jobs to local residents.It will make a backward place to become rich and developed.Such as a lot of scenic in the mountain.

Everything has two sides.After talk such a lot of profit of the tourism,let us look at its shortcoming.The development of tourism will seriously affect the local environment and it will cause the waste of resources.The excursionists will make a lot of pollution,like pollute the water of the scenic,may destroy the the natural landscape or historic buildings.For example the Forbidden City, there were 100,000 people everyday visited it in the October holiday 2009,the road and steps were seriously damaged,they are all cultural relics.And this not the deliberate destruction.Many visitors leave their name by knife or the other things on the wall.Although the relevant departments will maintain these,but it will cost a large amount of money and manpower,and it also cannot keep the original appearance.(newweb.dpm.org.cn)If the government and related departments cannot adopt corresponding measures, the positive will seriously damage tourism resources and related local cultural and material possessions.

For the local situation,Large Numbers of tourists will lead to traffic jam, hotel customers overmuch, seriously affect the local residents normal life.The too much tourism will increase the produce of garbage, vegetation destruction and may lead to local people and tourists some conflict.The conflict may be caused by the price of the souvenirs,different of the culture,different language may cannot very good in communication.

There are also a lot of conflicts between the travel companies,they also want to have more market share and have contradiction with the other companies.Because the profit of the tourism is very big,ever travel companies and personal work want to get the money from the big cake.There will a lot of problems between the local people which are caused by the tourism.

For all what the essay mentioned,the advantages and disadvantages of tourism depends on the policy decision of local government and related departments, and large parts of the in tourist and local people's cultural quality.If people pay more attention on the protect the environment of the tourist place and the good solution of the problems,tourism will bring people more benefits.

Reference:
tourism highlights 2009 edition http://unwot.org/
World Tourism Organization 2009
FIJET Introduction,http://www.fijet.net
newweb.dpm.org.cn

1 comment:

  1. Ian,

    This is a good essay and you clearly worked hard to paraphrase and reference materials. There is some problem structurally, as you have many short paragraphs but some lack clear topic sentences and are under developed due to their length. But, you have a clear argument at the end and show a balanced approach to the topic. Be careful with complex sentence structure and overuse of simple sentences.

    - good attempts at paraphrasing and referencing

    - be careful with topic sentences
    ex: The benefits of the visitors and the local.
    THIS IS A FRAGMENT (NOT A COMPLETE SENTENCE)

    - remember to use a mix of complex sentence structures and don't overuse simple sentences

    ex: And the tourism companies can provide more jobs to local residents.It will make a backward place to become rich and developed.Such as a lot of scenic in the mountain.

    - remember to include the date accessed when referencing a website
    ex: (newweb.dpm.org.cn, accessed 20/3/10)

    - incorrect vocabulary
    ex: overmuch

    - inaccurate use of idiom
    ex: to get the money from the big cake -->
    to take a slice of the pie

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